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Specific entries
cheerios and fruitloops
How very, very... random.
This is completely insane.
Um... I have nothing to say to this. It's just... what can I say to that? What is there
to say? It sounds like you wrote this about something different, and then went through and
replaced one particular word with "cheerios" and another particular word with "fruit loops." In
other words, they're metaphors for something — but I have no idea what.
Then completely out of the blue, you mention that your mother has been throwing things at your
head, and then go back to cheerios and fruit loops. I repeat: random.
I like the point you wind up with. There was a point to it all! It was all a
metaphor! You took a little while to get to the point, and when you did you only covered it
briefly, but I liked the entry. Very out-of-the-ordinary, funny, and yet thoughtful at the end.
You go girl. :-)
(22/30)
General content
This was what you originally
put as your "special" entry, so I thought I'd start off with that. It's a completely different
flavor from your cheerios and fruit loops entry, which is a good thing — I enjoyed the
fruit loops entry, but if every one had been like that, it would have gotten real old, real fast.
There isn't a huge amount of substance to this entry, but it's very... beautiful. I feel like I'm
reading a movie.
You have highly unoriginal entries. You include quiz results, chat logs, reviews (on which note I'd like to comment
— this site dedicated three words
to your content? THREE WORDS? God, review sites are so skimpy these days!), random lists lyrics, and other stuff generally pasted into your
entries, probably mostly from forwarded e-mails. We don't give a shit, honey. We want to hear
about you, through your writing. No, chat logs don't count!
You're kind of sweet at times, and a little worrying at other times (are your breasts OK lately?). You don't quite
paste other people's words, but you parrot other people a lot in your
diary.
This and this both sounded like they would have
been real fun if you'd been there — but it loses a lot in the re-telling. You're sixteen now? I'd guessed about 14/15ish
before I saw that... you sound a little younger than sixteen, as far as your emotional maturity
goes.
This had real emotion, which was a
good start... but the three words in the entry didn't exactly help share your feelings, other
than general frustration. What made you feel that way?
These entries are more like it! I felt a lot of
emotion from you there, you expressed it well and passionately, and I was able to relate,
remember times when I've felt a similar way. Good going.
It was horrible reading this... well-written, symbolic, emotional, all that good stuff... but ouch.
A lot of your entries I just found... blah. Boring.
The good ones (8/10) + the blah ones (2/10) + the completely unoriginal ones - lyrics, reviews, chat logs, etc (0/10) = (10/30)
Layout
I love your layout! I don't know if it matches your personality exactly, but I like it enough not to care about silly details like that. ;-) It's a simple greyscale one, but it has style. The top looks like a page with the top ripped off, and it's done pretty nicely. The writing at the top is quite pixellated, though, which is never a good look.
Your links are well-sorted, everything in its place. Wait a minute, you even did the layout yourself! You rock!
As for the archives page... uhhhh. It's a completely different layout from the entry page, which isn't a good start. But it's neat, with colors that match well, and I have no problems with anything other than the uncategorized links down the left. Oh, and the fact that you evidently haven't heard of this little thing we like to call archiving. You have every single one of your 324 entries on the one archives page! Insane, honey! Insane!
(14/20)
Spelling/grammar
Thier instead of their, and a few typos scattered through entries. You seldom use capitals,
and apostrophes only occasionally. Proof-read, my dear.
(4/10)
Definitely
No problems.
(5/5)
Technical
No problems.
(5/5)
Contact
Classic three, guestmap, tagboard and notes.
Last words
Officially, I don't look at extras or anything, but I wanted to comment that I liked
your little quotes thing at the end of each entry. It adds a little bit of depth and interest to
the entry, and to you as a person.
As for your writing... you could probably tell I was really disappointed in it. The first two entries I read were varied and unusual — they seemed promising, but the rest of your diary didn't live up to my expectations at all. Frankly, the vast majority of your entries just bored me. Too much day-to-day, not enough of the humor that you've shown you have, and not enough emotion. At least you get bonus points for listing us as "tell it like it is," though. :-)
(60/100)
earlier ←o→ later
